The following revision is taken from an Survey of the Literature by a
Thai-speaking postgraduate student of chemical engineering (c.f. Kibbitzer 32):
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It was shown that JS9 was unable to grow on (p-CT) due
to the absence of the enzyme necessary for metabolism of 2-methyl dienelactone (an
intermediate of the toluene digestion pathway). On the contrary, mutant strain JS62 is the
only strain that can grow on this substance (Haigler and Spain, 1989). |
It was shown that that JS6 was unable to grow on (p-CT)
due to the absence of the enzyme necessary for metabolism of 2-methyl dienaelactone (an
intermediate of the toluene digestion pathway). By contrast, mutant strain JS62 is the
only strain that can grow on this substance. (Haigler and Spain, 1989). |
The following table shows data rounded to the nearest digit for the occurrence per
million words of the connectives on the contrary, on the other hand
and by contrast in a high-prestige science research journal (Nature),
a popular science journal (New Scientist), and a broadsheet newspaper (The
Guardian).
Connective |
Nature |
New Scientist |
Guardian |
on the contrary
on the other hand
by contrast |
5
55
259 |
2
44
73 |
5
27
18 |
The following points emerge immediately from the table:
- The comparative rarity of the connective on the contrary in all three
publications.
- The greater use of the 'contrastive' connectives in texts on science when compared with
newspaper text.This is not surprising, since much scientific argument has to do with the
careful establishing of differences between entities, processes and theories.
- The remarkable weighting in Nature towards the connective by contrast
(approximately five times as frequent in that journal as on the other hand,
and eight times as frequent as the same connective in New Scientist).
The above results should be borne in mind in considering the following discussion of
the three connectives:
on the contrary
In modern written English, this connective is typically used to strengthen a
statement made with a negative. For example: It is not bad: on the contrary , it is
very good. Here are some citations which illustrate the use of on the
contrary:
- Nomadic herdsmen do not, by and and large, destroy their pastures. On the contrary, they
use it best.
- The Beveridge settlement ... did not take mass structural unemployment to be a fact of
life in Britain. On the contrary, full unemployment was one of the central pillars of the
postwar welfare state, ...
- These reports are not being produced "grudgingly" as suggested by New
Scientist. On the contrary, we have provided, as soon as available, the fullest possible
information on the nature of the problem found in this area.
- Andrew Neil, editor of the Sunday Times, lives alone, but not because he disdains the
company of women. 'On the contrary, I like women enormously, and see them as great
civilisers of men," he says.
- Roy Porter does not romanticise London's past. On the contrary, he does full justice to
the poverty and roughness of Hogarth's London, and to the appalling sanitary problems and
cholera epidemics of the mid-19th century.
Consideration of these examples should show why on the contrary is
inappropriate in the student's draft: it was clearly intended that the second sentence
should not merely strengthen the statement in the first sentence, but show a clear contrast
with it.
on the other hand
This was the student's first suggestion for a revision of her text. Was it possible to
distinguish it from by contrast (the consultant's preference)?. A rapid
trawl with Microconcord produced citations such as the following:
- Most secondary schools now have at least one CD-ROM drive. Portable computers, on the
other hand, remain an impractical option for schools.
- If our data are expressed in vague terms such as 'x is almost A' or 'y is just a little
bit B', then we cannot draw any conclusions using traditional logic. Fuzzy logic, on the
other hand, provides us with a method for drawing conclusions from such imprecise data.
- We don't want to cause undue alarm because the disease is so rare, but on the other hand
we need to give people the facts..
- According to one theory, the outer gases begin to fall inwards, but when they hit the
solid surface of the newly-formed neutron star a reverse shock wave rips outward through
the star. On the other hand, the outer gases might be flung out by the flood of neutrinos
from the star.
- Close proximity of inserted genes to those of the host concerned with DNA replication or
energy production might prove fatal to the host, and thus to the parasite. On the other
hand, the parasite may actually benefit from insertions which interfere with the host's
"morphogenetic" genes, those involved in development or by insertions near genes
that are responsible for making poisons.
Citations 1 & 2 have the basic structure: 'A is x: B is y', where there is a double
contrast between the topics (A & B) and the comments(x and y). For
sentences with this structure, the data show large numbers of citations with on the
other hand and with by contrast. Citations 3-5 on the other hand
have the structure 'A is both x and y': - i.e. the topic remains the same, and two
comments are made about it: for example, two contrasting conclusions from the facts
(citations 3 & 4), or two alternative consequences of an action (citation 5). For such
contexts it appears from the data (and from native-speaker intuition) that only on
the other hand is appropriate.
by contrast
We have already seen that the meaning of some contexts appears to allow allow the
connective on the other hand but not by contrast. Are there
contexts in which by contrast is possible, but not on the other hand?
Examination of the data (see, for example, the citations below) suggests that by
contrast cannot be distinguished on the basis of meaning, but that there is
a difference in formality and connotation, by contrast
emphasising that the contrast is important and worth taking seriously. This difference
seems to underlie the heavy weighting towards by contrast in the Nature
data, and was probably what led me to feel that in the student's text it would be more
appropriate than the 'casual' on the other hand.
- Control animals, whose tumours had been injected either with saline or with uninfected
mouse cells, were unaffected by the drug. By contrast, the tumours of 11 out of 14 animals
that had received the retrovirus disappeared.
- Most previous models of deep earthquakes postulate a priori the existence of a
planar structure (physical or thermal) that is inclined to the principal axes of stress
and which evolves into the fault. By contrast, the microstructures of our specimens
suggest a new, self-organizing mechanism that is intimately connected to the
transformation process and which exhibits striking analogy to the Griffith theory of
brittle fracture.
- Radioactivity that remained associated with the cells indicated that only a small
percentage (1.5- 3.5%) of surface HLA-DR was spontaneously internalized by these cells
(fig. 5b). By contrast, a similar experiment with iodinated anti-transferrin-receptor
monoclonal antibody3O showed that high levels of transferrin receptor were internalized
(peaking at 51%) and that receptors were recycled later on.
- Addition of purified centrosomes to the interphase extracts resulted in the assembly of
very long microtubules as early as 3 min after the beginning of the incubation at room
temperature when there was still little spontaneous polymerization. By contrast, addition
of purified centrosomes to the metaphase extracts nucleated the assembly of microtubules
that remained short over 30 min of incubation at room temperature.
- Destruction of dopamine-producing neurons causes Parkinson's disease, and it has long
been known that many of the symptoms of Alzheimer's disease reflect the gradual loss of a
class of neuron that releases a neurotransmitter called acetylcholine. By contrast, there
is no common disease process which selectively attacks 5-HT neurons.
1st February 1998 |
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