This revision is from a dissertation by a Thai-speaking student of
Occupational Health
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... the scheme ... will be evaluated following the steps mentioned
in the first chapter. |
... the scheme ... will be evaluated following the steps described
in the first chapter. |
The point here is not a large one, but it is one that seems very often to cause
problems for my students: to mention something does not take long, and shows
that it is not of central importance. Here, as the student confirmed, the steps for
evaluation were not merely mentioned in the first chapter, but described
in some detail.
For students who would like to have a little practice with the words mention
and describe I offer the following short exercise based on authentic data:
- The language used to __________ experimental arrangements and results has to be neutral
with respect to the theories tested. (describe, mention)
- In the exchange between Siegel and Relman, no names were ___________. (described,
mentioned)
- For Paracelsus and his followers, "chemicals" were inorganic materials. He
used mercury to cure diseases and Debus ___________, in detail, his use of antimony as a
purgative. (describes, mentions)
- They say they are interested in greenhouse gases, but the article gives few clues to
their thinking. For example, carbon dioxide is not ___________ at all. (described,
mentioned)
- In his paper, in 1929, Fleming ___________ the possible use of penicillin as an
antiseptic in surgical dressings, but the matter was taken no further. (described,
mentioned)
- We __________ a model, based on our data, for the way in which MAP2 and tau crosslink
microtubules. (describe, mention)
- The light's spectrum can be ___________ in terms of a wave which is made by combining
various amounts of different frequencies. (described, mentioned)
- Every once in a while, when I __________ to students that I did my first programming
with punched cards, and see the disbelief in their eyes, I am reminded how fast and how
far computing has come. (describe, mention)
- The first ____________ of Christmas Day, as far as we know, was in the Roman calendar
for the year 354. (description, mention)
- Any complete ____________ of an organism must include an account of its energy
transactions. (description, mention)
Check your answers
29th April 1998 |
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